On a happier note, here is the link to last week's post, which this piece finishes off: http://enkousama.blogspot.com/2013/03/sffs_15.html
Read them together and there should be a joke in here somewhere. Or not.
Either way, enjoy.
I opened the door and was greeted by a short young girl dressed in an olive green, Victorian-style suit, complete with an ascot and a cloak. Her platinum-blond hair gleamed in the afternoon sun and her skin seemed to glisten. Her penetrating green eyes matched my own color but burned with an intensity that seemed to weigh your soul and then judge accordingly.
The girl broke the slowly increasingly awkward silence. “Hello, brother.”
I shook myself out of my daze. Just seeing my sister mere feet away from me was enough to induce anxiety. Over the years I had learned that the only way to deal with stress is to laugh and occasionally give in to minor bouts of madness.
I gave in.
Glancing toward the sky, as if praying, I said, “Good one.”
Love this phrase: "...burned with an intensity that seemed to weigh your soul and then judge accordingly."
ReplyDeleteSounds like one of those less than pleasant family reunions!
Oh you have no idea. Hehe
DeleteYou did a wonderful job with the description. I can really picture her in my head.
ReplyDeleteThank you. :D
DeleteI guess only Sam Spade gets the beautiful dames....I'm sure the last person he wanted was his sister! nice!
ReplyDeleteYeah. His sister cock blocks him even on the fourth wall
DeleteNice set up for the "sister" surprise and some great details and tension. I liked the last line, really defines the character through dialogue.
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteLots of nice phrases in that excerpt! Curious about this sister. Why did she come now?
ReplyDeleteWell I can't really tell but it's not good news for Erik lemme tell you that
DeleteI love the elements of this: the details, high emotion and look into his relationship with his sister. There's a great amount of tension in this. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteThank you :) I try my best to give Erik a painful life
DeleteAhh... enter the antagonist?
ReplyDeleteMaayyybbbeeeeee?
DeleteVery nice. I sense she's not exactly happy to see him...and vice versa.
ReplyDeleteEvil twin sister. No one is happy to see that
DeleteSince I read it already, I'll just keep my mouth shut. But, as I thought the first time, great description on the sister! :D
ReplyDeleteYay. Thank you. Creepy people are so much fun to play around with
DeleteExcellent snippet! And his reaction is great!!!
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